Many people believe that women make better parents than men and that is why they have the greater role in raising children in most societies. Others claim that men are just as good as women at parenting. Write an essay expressing your point of view. Give reasons for your answers and provide relevant example and experience you might have.

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Many people believe
women
make better
parents
than
men
since the beginning of time. Throughout history,
women
played a great role in raising
children
in many societies and some other people claim
men
make good
parents
than
women
. The issue of whether or not
women
make better
parents
than
men
is always a debatable topic. Strong arguments are there from
both
sides and let us discuss them in a detailed way.
Firstly
,
heir
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their
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are
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is
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always attached to the
mother
and feel free to reach out for anything. An instance illustrating
this
in action is, that almost all of my friends are attached to my
mother
rather than my father. It is obvious from
this
that the
mother
has a greater role in
children
's upbringing.
In addition
to
this
, mothers are good role models for their offspring and they always try to follow them naturally a
mother
can become a better parent than the father.
For example
, every child shares their happiness or sorrow with the
mother
first
. Currently,
both
men
and
women
are working in all families and
children
are attached equally to
both
of them.
For example
, the kids of my friends are attached equally to
both
predecessor
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predecessors
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.
This
clearly shows that
men
also
make better
parents
.
In addition
to that,
men
started sharing the responsibility of
children
and a child
also
slowly reaching to the dad. So it has been proven that males are
also
better
parents
than
women
.
Thus
it is recommended that
men
and
women
both
can make good
parents
and take responsibility for their scion. It is better to share the responsibilities as much as to share the love.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • parenting
  • nurturing
  • paternal
  • maternal
  • societal expectations
  • gender roles
  • co-parenting
  • emotional intelligence
  • child-rearing
  • caregiver
  • egalitarian
  • stereotype
  • nuclear family
  • single parent
  • shared custody
  • bonding
  • child development
  • primary caregiver
  • compassionate
  • empathetic
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