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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by seleting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by seleting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given plans inform about road access to a
city
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 hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
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, they summarise the main development from 2007 to 2010
such
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 as roundabouts
bus
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 station and extended can parks. In 2007, the
city
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 hospital was in the center and the ring was all over it. The hospital artery connected the
city
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 artery with the ring course. There were six
bus
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 stops on hospital
rd
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 three on each side exactly and can park: staff and public were
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 placed on the eastern side of it. Letter on 2010, There were a lot of changes in access roads though the ring highway remained untouched Hospital
rd
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 was introduced with two circle type roads called “roundabout”, one was in the joint of the ring road and hospital
rd
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 where another one was in the joint of
city
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 artery and hospital
rd
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. Right-side
bus
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 stops were replaced by a
bus
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 station.
Car
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 park: staff and public, were spitted into two different
car
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 parks, one for workers and the other for public. Staff can place was remained the same position of the previous
car
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 place, but public
car
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 park moved next to the ring course.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, bus, rd, car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic flow
  • road access
  • ring road
  • bus stops
  • bus station
  • congestion
  • parking facilities
  • pedestrian crossings
  • vehicular flow
  • organizational structure
  • accessibility
  • enhancements
  • configuration
  • dedicated
  • diverting traffic
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