You have seen an advertisement in an Australia magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter -explain why you would like the job Give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ Say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear Mr Adam, I write with reference to the advertisement posted in the Australia Daily Magazine on a caretaker for your son and would be pleased if you could consider my suitability for the role. I and my wife, Nayomi moved to Australia a few months back and I am currently employed at Walmart as Cashier with ample free time over the weekends. Nayomi works at Dilmah Australia and

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we have a lot of time to spare over the weekends. I am following a course in Aeronautical Engineering and a lot of my spare time is spent studying the course content in preparation for my Exams in December 2022. We currently live down North wood, which is just a few

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walk from the address you had posted in the magazine and

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opportunity excites me, especially since we do not have children of our own. Would love to hear from you should you feel I would suit the role Yours Sincerely Johann

Submitted by nayomi28 on Sat Sep 10 2022

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

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secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
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however
although
even though
despite

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2Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

165 words

7.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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