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Some believe that people are naturally born leaders while others feel that leadership skills can develop. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#believe #people #leaders #leadership #skills
Leadership
 is an attribute which makes people stand out and prominent. The
ability
 to be able to lead is a
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God given
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 blessing, according to some. To others, anyone can excel at
this
 skill. In my opinion, not all
leaders
 are ‘born
leaders
’ and various factors including society, circumstances,
upbringing
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, contribute
towards
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to
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 a personality which
then
 comes out as a leader. Those who advocate the idea of naturally born
leaders
 tend to refer
this
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ability
to
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 genetics and family background. They claim that bloodline had a deep impact
over
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 a person’s foresight and
decision making
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 tendency.
Hence
,
leadership
 can only be attained by those who have witnessed their family members leading, not
otherwise
.
On the contrary
, the other school of thought solely ignore the above narrative and are of the opinion that with the help of continuous learning and hard work, one can develop
leadership
 skills. They propagate that influencing is not related to the parents an individual is born to, it is rather an
ability
than
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 anyone can achieve. In
real life
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 examples,
leaders
 like Malcolm X, Che Guevara,
Khumeni
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Khomeini
, and many
were
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others were
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 ordinary people who belonged to the general class of society yet they managed to lead and bring about a change. To sum up, based on observations and experiences, it can be established that
leadership
 is not an innate
ability
. People can be good
leaders
 if they learn from personal and others’ experiences.
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