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In many developing countries,there is a problem with declining qaulity of air and water from both indsutry and construction. What measures could be taken to prevent this.

Construction and
Industries
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 now have become
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 major part of
developed
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a developed
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country
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countries
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. Countries are trying to open various
industries
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 in their
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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 so that their country can become more developed. But
with
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this
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 rise in industry and construction over the decade
have
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 caused
the
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a
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reduce
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 in the
air
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 and
water
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quality
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 of the country. The one main problem of
reduce
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 in
air
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quality
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 is because of harmful gases used by these
industries
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. These
industries
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uses
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 gases like Carbon monoxide, Sulphur and other highly dangerous chemicals for constructing things.
Due to
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which
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 when these gases got
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release
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released
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 into
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air
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the air
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 as smoke, they form highly substantiate
substance
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substances
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 which reduces the
quality
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 of
air
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. Apart from reducing
air
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quality
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, it has
also
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lead
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 to
decrease
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a decrease
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 in
water
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quality
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. The reason behind
this
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 problem is the
waste
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 which got thrown in
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water
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the water
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 by the companies. Due to
which
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,
this
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water
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get
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 transferred into our home through internal
water
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 lines and we don’t get the
fresh
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freshwater
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water
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as
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we used to get before. Government can take various initiatives to stop
this
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 reduction
of
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in
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air
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 and
water
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quality
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.
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, they can force
industries
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 to use resources which are not harmful to our
environment
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environments
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such
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 as
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greenhouses
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green houses
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greenhouses
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 and renewable resources so that there will be no
harmful
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 released
in
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 our atmosphere.
In addition
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 to
this
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, they can
also
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 impose industrial laws for industrial
waste
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such
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 that if anyone tries to throw industrial
waste
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then
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they
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 will face heavy fines. In conclusion, Both
industries
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 and construction have caused
reduction
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a reduction
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 in
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air
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the air
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 and
water
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quality
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 of the cities. There are some possible ways
which
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in which
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 countries can
took
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 stop these damages
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 as forcing
industries
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 to use renewable and
eco friendly
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eco-friendly
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 resources and imposing heavy fines on
disposing
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ofdisposing
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waste
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 into
water
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. These changes will help in improving both
air
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 and
water
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quality
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.

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