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Explain the trend of shop closure and opening in a country.

#trend #shop #closure #country
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The chart illustrates the changes in the
number
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 of
shops
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 that closed and opened between 2011 and 2018 in a nation. In 2011, around 8500
shops
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 opened, while the
number
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 of closures was just above 6400. From
this
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 point, a downward trend can be seen, as the
openings
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 plummet to 4000, but the
rate
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 of closures decreased marginally and reached 6000 in 2012.
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, after several fluctuations, the
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 of
shops
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 closed reached 6500 by 2014, whereas
shop
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openings
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 increased by 2300 and reached 6300.
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, the numbers in both categories decreased in 2015, as the
number
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 of
shops
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 closed plunged to 600 only, but the
shop
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 opening
rate
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 fell at a much slower
rate
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 and touched 4000.
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, the
number
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 of
shops
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 closing in 2016 soared to 5100, and with a slight fall in 2017, it touched back to 5100.
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, with a minimal increase to 4100 in 2017, the
shop
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 opening
rate
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 diminished to 3000 by 2018. In summary, there were several variations in the amount of both
shop
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 closures and
openings
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, but both showed a decreasing trend.
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, enterprise
openings
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 decreased at a much higher
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 compared to the closure
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, though the
shop
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 closure
number
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 became the least in 2015.
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