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The issue of being gay remains controversial. Some people think that this trend has adverse effect on the society while others believe that it is seen as a natural trend and right for people to choose this type of gender. Should being gay be legal? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The issue of gay love remains controversial. Some
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 while others believe that it is a natural tendency and it is right for
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. In
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 think that being gay has
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society
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. It is true that many youngsters nowadays are living without a standard rule. They just want to try everything without thinking about the effect on
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 because they have a mindset and a lifestyle that they should be able to try everything they want.
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, a model in Thailand changed his gender from male to female and back. Being
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 and set up a negative tendency for youngsters nowadays.
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, others believe that it is seen as a natural trend and right for
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 is becoming more modern and
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 do not have to hide their gen

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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