Some people believe that reading books are better than watching TV or playing computer games for children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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youngsters should spend their
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reading
books
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their
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watching television or playing computer games. In my opinion, I totally disagree with the statement because
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believe every activity has its own merits.
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reasons
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reasons
for my stance as well as examples in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin
with,
books
are
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source of knowledge. In spite of accessing
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information
informtion
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information
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easy because of
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books
are
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preferred
prefferd
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preferred
over digital sources. Reading
books
will help to perform well in your academics. Not only in academics but they
also
help you in your career. For an instance, in a
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it was found that people who read
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have experienced a rapid
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growth in
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growth in
their professional life. The habit of reading
books
regularly would allow you to have
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time table
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.
On the other hand
, there is more to life than reading
books
and gaining knowledge. Childhood plays a vital role in developing the character of a person.
Although
, reading
books
has its
advatages
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advantages
children should
also
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participate
partcipate
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participate
in other
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activities
activites
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activities
such
as watching television, playing sports or computer games. These activities
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helps
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help
teenagers to
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develop
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develop
other skills
such
as acting, singing, etc. It
also
helps children have an active social life and experience every aspect of their childhood.
Yongsters
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Youngsters
should find a balance between their study hours and
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leisure
time
. In conclusion, reading
books
is not the only thing to do in childhood, teenagers should
also
have fun by watching T.V or playing video games.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive development
  • focus and concentration
  • mental stimulation
  • expand vocabulary
  • improve grammar
  • imaginative thinking
  • creativity
  • passive consumption
  • empathy
  • social isolation
  • eye strain
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • screen usage
  • language learning
  • health impacts
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