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Many people consider that increasing the age at which people can get driving licenses can improve road safety

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With the development of technology and , the advent of automobiles living was simple but
people
 for driving had to get driving
licenses
 and had 18 years old. On the other ,hand some
people
 believe that increasing the for have license
licenses
 can improve road safety and I completely agree.
First
 of all, when someone's age is between 25_30 they get to the maturation and able to choose the best way so they never do dangerous work and when they driving, they are be careful.
Therefore
, it is good for everyone that
governments
 make laws to get driving
licenses
.
Second
, when the
governments
 make a law that just
people
 who have driving licences and are more than 25 age
this
 improve road safety and decrease accident.
Also
, parents thanks
governments
 to save their children's life. In ,addition it creates to reduce the number of fatalities on the roads. In conclusion,
governments
 can create correct laws between
people
 can preserve their life so
this
 rule raising the age of driving
licenses
 , increase the pathway of security.
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