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Many people consider that increasing the age at which people can get driving licenses can improve road safety

#people #age #licenses #road #safety
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With the development of technology and , the advent of automobiles living was simple but
people
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 for driving had to get driving
licenses
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 and had 18 years old. On the other ,hand some
people
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 believe that increasing the for have license
licenses
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 can improve road safety and I completely agree.
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 of all, when someone's age is between 25_30 they get to the maturation and able to choose the best way so they never do dangerous work and when they driving, they are be careful.
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, it is good for everyone that
governments
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 make laws to get driving
licenses
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.
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, when the
governments
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 make a law that just
people
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 who have driving licences and are more than 25 age
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 improve road safety and decrease accident.
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, parents thanks
governments
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 to save their children's life. In ,addition it creates to reduce the number of fatalities on the roads. In conclusion,
governments
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 can create correct laws between
people
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 can preserve their life so
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 rule raising the age of driving
licenses
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 , increase the pathway of security.
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