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Employers should give their employees 4 weeks holiday each year so that they can do their job better. To what extent do you agree with this suggestion?

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In certain parts of the world, companies are legally obliged to allow their staff a month of annual leave. In other countries,
workers
 are not entitled to any paid holiday whatsoever. I consider that offering employees time off is beneficial both to the organisation and the individual concerned.
This
 approach has significant advantages for businesses. When members of staff are able to take holidays, they are calmer and more tranquil, leading to a better atmosphere in the workplace. Conflict and disagreement are far less probable amongst colleagues who have had a reasonable break. Perhaps even more importantly,
workers
 who are fully rested tend to be more productive and
this
 obviously has a positive impact on profits. They will usually have higher energy levels and the ability to put in
extra
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 effort.
Finally
, employees are unlikely to take days off sick, which
also
 means that the firm they work for will be more successful and prosperous. Clearly, having adequate holiday periods will allow
workers
 to avoid serious illnesses and diseases, especially stress-related ones.
This
 policy
also
 has positive implications for individuals.
Workers
 given
holiday
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 will be happier and will feel fulfilled. They are likely to have an excellent attitude towards the life they lead, having spent quality time with
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loved ones
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 and having rested and relaxed sufficiently.
This
 may have wider, societal repercussions: having more contented
workers
 may well lead to a society which is more stable and whose members feel rewarded and valued. Overall, there is absolutely no doubt that offering staff a considerable amount of paid vacation makes sense. It has positive consequences for
workers
, companies and the wider community. I wish policy-makers around the globe would realise
this
 and introduce legislation in every country making a period of annual leave compulsory.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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