More and more work is being carried out by machines in all areas of our lives. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? Discuss with appropriate examples.

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this

modern world, we can observe that more and more

work

is being carried out by

machines

. We will discuss

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the pros and cons of

this

development and some examples will be elaborated

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this

essay. We can observe that in many industries and companies worldwide,

machines

and robots are replacing humans.

Firstly

, one of the main

reason

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reasons

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is labour is expensive,

therefore

, industries prefer to do long time

investment

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investments

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by buying sophisticated

machines

which in the long run will be more

benefic

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benefit

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to the company.

For example

, in the sugarcane sector, people were cutting down the sugarcane but nowadays

this

task is being done by

machines

Secondly

, mankind

are

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not willing to

work

hard like before, absence due to sickness is more frequent and sometimes

this

may delay the process of

work

in a company. So,

this

is one more reason that

machines

are replacing humans.

Machines

require maintenance, but they can operate

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twenty four

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hours without stopping and are

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less

les

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less

prone to make errors.

Moreover

, because of the use of more

machines

in industries, we notice that the number of unemployment is increasing drastically , which is obviously enhancing poverty.

However

, automation and

robots

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doing

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multitasks are

also

a benefit for human beings. In my company, robots are performing tasks which were very bulky for a human. Nowadays, with

this

facility,

staffs

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can focus on analysing and having a more

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work-life

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work life

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balanced, where they do not need to

work

odd hours. In the near future, there is no doubt that

machines

will replace human beings in many companies, eventually causing unemployment. On the

otherside

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other side

, technology is improving many processes in several companies, definitely improving the life quality of humans by reducing workloads,

distribution

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of products

are

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made in a timely manner.

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2Word repetition
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4 paragraphs

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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