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It’s important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What sort of punishments should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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Children should be empowered by knowledge to understand what are the things, that are good or bad, which are affecting
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 there are many ways to teach them right or wrong, some people believe punishment is the best option for it. In my point of view, I
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punishments
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punishments
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teenage, their
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badly. Once, children are punished
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in front
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 of others for their
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, they are more vulnerable to
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, social phobia and refrain from group activities. They think, their opinion and support might not be required by others since
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 they were punished. For
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 of the state schools in Sri Lanka still use
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, a number of students have
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personality
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Punishments
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disability
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, according to the research findings in 2020, which was conducted by Oxford University, more than 60% of total childhood mental disorders related to the
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 early age.
Hence
, parents and teachers have a responsibility to think twice before punishing them. In order to teach merits and demerits
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 their children, parents and teachers can use different methods which are less harmful
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 TV,phones and Internet access for some time period if they misbehave.
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, they can be educated about the consequences if they do wrong .
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, social negligence and being
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 prison. In conclusion, how to filter good and bad in
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 stage is hard, but it should be taught.
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 negative impact on
personality
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