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It is important for children to learn the difference between right nad wrong at n early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should be parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from you own knowledge or experience.

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The given table compares five
countries
 in terms of the
percentage
 of consumer outlay of three different categories in 2002. Overall, it is clear that the
percentage
 of expenditure on Food/ Drink
/
Tobacco was the highest in all five
countries
, whereas the figure for leisure and education showed the lowest.
In addition
, Turkey had generally the highest
percentage
 in all three categories. Looking
first
 at Food, drink and tobacco, in all the
countries
, it comprised the highest
percentage
 in all categories. The biggest figure showed in Turkey, at about 32 per
cent
, and the
second
 highest number appeared in Ireland, at 28 per
cent
. Both of the percentages were much higher than that in Spain, Sweden and Italy, which are all less than 20 per
cent
. Moving on clothing
/
footwear and leisure
/
education, Italy had the highest
percentage
 that spent on clothing and footwear, at 9 per
cent
, while other
countries
 had roughly a similar figure at about 6.5 per
cent
, whereas Sweden was the only country that spent under 6 per
cent
. As for leisure and education, none of the nations spent more than 5 per
cent
 on
this
 category, and it comprised even the lesser in Spain, at merely 1.98 per
cent
.
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