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Some group of people have benefited from modern communications technology but some people do not have benefit at all. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 graph illustrates the average world
oil
price
 for each
year
 from 1970 to 2005. the
second
 graph depicts the top seven
oil
 exporting countries and much they export per
day
. overall, it shows a rapid increase from the
year
 1970 to 1983
although
then
 reverse action is seen, in the world
oil
price
. while in the
second
 graph Saudi Arabia is the largest exporting country and
second
 Russia respectively.
Firstly
, from the
year
 1970 to 1974, there was a surge in
price
 from 8$ to 47$, and similar growth was seen from the
year
 1977 to 1982 which was 44$ to 87$ respectively. meanwhile, at that time
price
 was the highest. from 1980 to 2005, it shows various kinds of fluctuation in the
price
. Saudi Arabia was the highest
oil
 exporter in the
year
 2005, at 9 million barrels per
day
. The
second
 largest exporter was Russia at approximately 6.5 million barrels per
day
 in the same
year
. whereas four countries lie in the range of 2 to 4 million barrels per
day
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • modern communications technology
  • global connectivity
  • remote work
  • digital divide
  • e-commerce
  • socioeconomic status
  • geography
  • impersonal
  • face-to-face communication
  • over-reliance
  • cyberbullying
  • misinformation
  • privacy concerns
  • tech-savvy
  • health implications
  • eye strain
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