People still value artists in the age of advanced science and technology. Why do you think this is? Are arts as important as science and technology?

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As an effective medium to document expression,

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is playing a significant role in contemporary society and

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artists

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enjoying the

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others. It seems to me that there are many reasons to account for

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phenomenon. Yet I believe the importance of arts is overestimated and science and technology

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more emphasis. The root reason why

artists

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are valued in modern society, in my opinion, is their creative production, which contributes to conveying emotions and passing on cultures. It is true that

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emotions

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as joy and sorrow are typically beyond literal description and

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result

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can hardly be correctly presented.

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Art works

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like music and paintings,

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, express

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intangible feelings in an accessible way and

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are cherished by

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, the creative work done by

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can be treated as a valuable part of culture. With the prosperity of arts, the current customs, traditions and even rituals can be easily passed on to the future generations. In spite of the value of

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, I believe

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should attach more importance to the development of science and technology. Compared with the implicit benefits brought by arts,

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scientific

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and technological revolutions can directly improve

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's standard of living, without which human beings may not be able to appreciate masterpieces and get emotionally satisfied. After all, when suffering from starvation, most

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would not have the patience to think about what Van Gogh saw from his bedroom window

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he was painting The Starry

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evidence, the advantages brought by science and technology outweigh the positive influence of

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art works

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. In summary,

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and their

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art works

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have gained popularity for emotional and cultural reasons, but I believe

people

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should give priority to scientific and technological research as it is more realistic and urgent.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction
Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

304 words

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People still value artists in the age of advanced science and technology. Why do you think this is? Are arts as important as science and technology?

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

You recently attend a meeting at a hotel.when you returned home,you found you had left some papers at the hotel. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel.In your letter Say where you think you left the papers Explain why they are so important Tell the manager what you want him/her to do

Wealthy nations should assist poorer countries with humanitarian relief during natural disasters. Do you agree or disagree?

The school library is seeking applicants for a job over summer break. Write a letter to the library's manager, in your letter include: -A brief introduction of yourself -Your experience and relevant skills. -Why you want the job

Governments give lots of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been spent better elsewhere. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In many families nowadays, both parents work and pay people to look after their children. Some people believe this is not good for families. To what extend do you agree or disagree?