The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location.

The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location.
Wave
energy becomes one of the renewable energy that
making
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profit
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in the area of high waves. The mechanical of the producing electronics from
this
will
be describe
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. The main
part
is composed of the chambers which is the
part
that let the air flows into the chamber. The air
pressing
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the turbine from two
side
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in opposite direction, wind from above and wind from under
zone
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the zone
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of the
wave
to make
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making
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the turbine
running
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. When the turbine
moving
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its
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will cause the electricity generated. Apart from the main
part
, the machines need to operate in the
part
where large
wave
normally occurs
then
the output will come greater than operating in a small
waves
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zone
.
Nevertheless
,
large
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wave
zone
will cost high installation more than operating in
small
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a small
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wave
zone
.
Finally
, cost input
need
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to
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calculation
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and
evaluation
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with the outcome.
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