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Scientists advise people to lead a healthy lifestyle, but most people continue with unhealthy activities. Why do you think it is and what can do with it?e

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The given table compares three different health
centres
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 in terms of the
services
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 that were evaluated by patients. Overall, it is noticeable that
Peveril
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 centre had the highest average point, whereas Langston had the lowest.
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, the largest disparity in the score can be seen in the service of the response to the concern. Looking
first
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 at the
services
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 of booking appointments and response to concerns, a marked gap can be seen in these two categories. The score of
Peveril
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 in these two
services
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, at 9.1 and 9.6, was higher than that of other
centres
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, whereas Langston centre received only 5.2 and 4.3 points. Moving onto other
services
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, all three
centres
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 had a relatively high score in doctor service, with scores all over 8. In the category of care for children,
Peveril
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 and Marchbanks centre received generally the same figure at 7.4, while Langston scored only 6.3 points. With regard to Pharmacy, all
centres
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 showed roughly the lowest point, only
Peveril
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 scored over 6, at 6.3.
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