Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? In about 300 words, give examples to support your ideas.

Mr Richard Simons Social Worker 67 Epping Road Macquarie Park NSW 2113 September 8, 2018 RE: Ms Sonia Calllesina, 74 years old. Dear Mr Simons, I am writing to introduce Ms Sonia Callesina, who was treated at Newtown Hospital for Intestinal Obstruction that resulted in an Inguinal Hernia. He needs daily visitations and support after discharge. Her social background reveals, that she
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a widower since 2011.
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, she has a daughter who lives nearby but cannot see her mother
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she always stays alone. During her stay at the hospital, she developed depression and wanted to end her life.
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, she shows hesitancy to feed herself and less interest in her grooming and her personal hygiene. A sudden change of mood was observed in Ms Callesina and refused to take her medications.
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she shows childish behaviour she can mobilize.
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, she always wants to see her daughter. It would be appreciated if you could visit her every day to provide support and counsel.
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beneficial if you could encourage her to participate in social help groups and to communicate with her neighbours to avoid her
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of loneliness.
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, she will be shifted to the Rehabilitation Center of Newtown and has an upcoming appointment with her psychologist on August 25, 2018. If you have any questions, do not hesitate to contact me. Yours Sincerely, Nurse
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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