It is nowadays seen that many students are part-time employed. Discuss advantages and disadvantages

In those times many people during education have
part-
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the part-time
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time
job
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jobs
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. Students that are part-
time
employed could have their own
money
and they can teach something;
however
, they might have less
time
. The two main advantages of half-
time
work
are making some cash and
learn
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something.
Firstly
, scholars,that are working could make
money
,
whenever
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their parents give them
money
or not. It is simple that learners need to have essentials and pay
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for
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tor
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it
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them
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like:
cut
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hair,
buy
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any
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apply
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cosmetics and pay for bills. An example of
this
are
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polish students. They usually hire and live in small flats or in an academic, so after every payment, their wallet
are
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thin.
However
they take
part-
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a part-time
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time
job
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jobs
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and they can buy things, that they want.
On the other hand
, scholars have
work
,
therefore
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they
thay
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they
have less
time
.
Every
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students
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after periods don't have
time
for themselves because after lessons they have to go to
work
. Many people say, that they can't take care
for
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their health:like going to the gym,or preparing healthy food. The
second
advantage is learning in the
job
. Many employees,that are in
work
learn something new.
This
is good for their development and skil.
For instance
people in
job
goes to courses,
moreover
they improve themselves in any part of life or
job
. In conclusion,
although
learners can earn
money
and feel how to
work
hard
that is
better than do nothing.
However
they have less
time
for prepering to uniwersity or periods.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tuition fees
  • educational institutions
  • higher education
  • social classes
  • free higher education
  • student loans
  • scholarships
  • funding models
  • financial burden
  • publicly funded
  • privately funded
  • online education
  • MOOCs (Massive Open Online Courses)
  • investing in education
  • economy
  • individual livelihood
  • commercializing
  • academic integrity
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