Some people think that countries should limit the amount of food that they import and mainly eat products from their own country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many
persons
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people
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believe that
,
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it is a mistake
importing
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to import
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food
from other countries as local
food
producers
have enough products for consumers, and
this
trend
schould
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should
be changed. I m
totaly
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totally
agree with
this
statement, and I think endemic farmers and
food
companies must be privileged.
Firstly
,
topical
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tropical
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plants and other
animal based
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animal-based
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foodstuff
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foodstuffs
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are healthier because of their freshness and they are cheaper than
the
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apply
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imported ones.
Shorter
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way that vegetables and fruits
goes
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go
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thrue
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through
from farms to markets
it
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is better because they keep the vitamins and oligo elements inside them.
For
example
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example,
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those
plantbased
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plant-based
plant based
products which are imported
has
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have
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to be
harvest
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harvested
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much earlier
due to
the long
traveling
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travelling
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way to other
countries
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countries'
country's
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markets.
For
this
reason
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reason,
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producers
treats
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treat
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them with lots of
chimicals
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chemicals
to keep the freshness.
Same
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The same
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thing
are
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is
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happening with
meathbased
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meat-based
Meath-based
foods too. To keep the warranty as long as
posible
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possible
, the meat has to be treated with
chimicals
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chemicals
, which is
harmfull
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harmful
for
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to
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our health. More than that, the way from farms to shops is shorter ,
the
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and the
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cost of transportation is cheaper, which is reflected in the prices.
Secondly
,
limiting
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by limiting
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the amount of
food
that we import we support the local
bussinisses
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businesses
and farmers,
consequently
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consequently,
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the local budget is enriched. It is obvious
,
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that, purchesing
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by purchesing
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purchesing
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purchasing
our foods from autochthon
producers
we
contribut
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contribute
to those
companies
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companies'
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profits which profit will return
in
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on
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local development through taxes and profit reinvestments by the companies. More than that, the
money-reinvestment
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money reinvestment
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bring
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brings
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the locals
well
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apply
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being
Verb problem
well-being
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on
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to
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the
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a
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higher level. In conclusion, I strongly believe importing less
foods
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food
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and supporting the local
producers
are the best for our
heath
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health
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and
also
is profitable for us and for our whole
communitie
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community
.
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  • dietary variety
  • international trade relations
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  • exports
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