Some people think that countries should limit the amount of food that they import and mainly eat products from their own country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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believe that

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importing

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food

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plants and other

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foodstuff

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are healthier because of their freshness and they are cheaper than

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imported ones.

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way that vegetables and fruits

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through

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is better because they keep the vitamins and oligo elements inside them.

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products which are imported

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markets.

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them with lots of

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chemicals

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happening with

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possible

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our health. More than that, the way from farms to shops is shorter ,

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cost of transportation is cheaper, which is reflected in the prices.

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limiting

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the amount of

food

that we import we support the local

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businesses

and farmers,

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the local budget is enriched. It is obvious

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purchesing

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purchasing

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profits which profit will return

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local development through taxes and profit reinvestments by the companies. More than that, the

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bring

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the locals

well

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higher level. In conclusion, I strongly believe importing less

foods

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food

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and supporting the local

producers

are the best for our

heath

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health

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and

also

is profitable for us and for our whole

communitie

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community

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Topic Vocabulary:

domestically produced food
agricultural sector
carbon footprint
greenhouse gas emissions
food security
global market fluctuations
trade disputes
local food production
dietary variety
international trade relations
retaliation
exports

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Some people think that countries should limit the amount of food that they import and mainly eat products from their own country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people think that zoos are all cruel and should be shut down. Others, however, believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals.

Government investment in the arts,such as music and theatre is a waste of money. Government must invest this money in public service instead. Do you agree or disagree.

Nowadays in many countries young people leave rural areas to study or work in cities. What are the reasons for this? Do the benefits of this outweigh the disadvantages?

These days, we are seeing an increasing amount of violence on television, and this is having a negative impact on children's behaviour. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that we learn best through in-person interaction with a teacher in a classroom. Others believe that online learning is more effective. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.