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The growing number of overweight people is putting starin on health care systems in an effort to deal with health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical eductaion lessons in school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#people #starin #health #care #systems #effort #eductaion #lessons #school #curriculum
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health related
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 issues of obese people nowadays is being considered stressful on health care systems as the population of
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over weight
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 is on the rise.  Giving importance to physical education by increasing the number of classes in
school
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 curriculum is a way to sort out
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 matter according to some individuals. I strongly disagree
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 appropriate reasons which are mentioned below to support my dissent.
Firstly
, it will be wrong to say that pupils will remember everything taught at
school
 for the rest of their life.
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, we usually forget the lessons or subjects studied in
school
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 period of time
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 or some may forget later on after moving to college.
Obesity
 is purely due to
lack
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 of physical inactivity
in addition
 to
sedentary
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lifestyle
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life style
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.
Hence
 it will be more beneficial if the employer gives importance to physical activity and/or indoor-outdoor activities as a part of
employee
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 fitness program.
Secondly
, increasing the number of lessons on physical
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education
eductaion
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education
 or making physical education mandatory cannot reduce
obesity
. If the student itself is not interested in the subject, no matter how much importance one gives, if not followed practically
then
 it is of no use.
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 we all know that people smoke
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in spite
inspite
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in spite
 of being aware of its dangerous effects on the body.
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, I strongly disagree
on
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 increasing physical education lessons in
school
 to tackle  increasing
obesity
. It will only help in creating some awareness but not reducing
obesity
 unless the government fines for leading
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 lifestyle.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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