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In many workplaces, online communication is becoming more commonplace than face-to-face meetings, and this is a positive development. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#workplaces #communication #meetings #development
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 and understand the problem cause. Is there any relation between
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customer
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 to ensure the quality of
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why
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and
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 one
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 comparatively to others. Highlight the statistical graphs of FTR & MTTR for the
last
 3 years in the monthly BPR report If the same
customer
 is complaining a third time,
then
O&M
Correct article usage
an O&M
show examples
 review is required to investigate the issue in
detailed
Replace the word
detail
show examples
Automate the
reports
 to avoid manual
reports
 to reduce the risk of reporting errors In some
way
, 196 is directly assigning the
tickets
 to
O&M
 and by-passing
NOC
 that need to investigate
along with
 the
way
 forward Noticed repetitive complaints about
E-SIM
 where
NOC
 suggested to the
customer
 to replace the SIM.
This
 point needs to
investigate
Wrong verb form
be investigated
show examples
 and understand the problem cause. Is there any relation between
E-SIM
 and
customer
 slow browsing?
Staff
 Training is required for Radhwan &
Ali
Correct word choice
and Ali
show examples
 to ensure the quality of
tickets
 and to avoid repetition Need to go through the
tickets
 again,
why
Correct word choice
and
show examples
 one
staff
 (Ahmed Mahmood 16%) is escalating the
tickets
 to
O&M
 comparatively to others.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • flexibility
  • convenience
  • collaboration
  • efficiency
  • real-time editing
  • digital whiteboards
  • nuanced understanding
  • relationship-building
  • team cohesion
  • exacerbating
  • isolation
  • remote work
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