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Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Technology
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 has always been the key driver of human development, but especially in the
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 it has crucially impacted our lives in many different aspects. The benefits of cutting-edge technologies in any field
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 as communication, science, or for industrial purposes have fueled the most recent changes in the workplace and schools. There is no denying that the importance of
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 at
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 has become essential for our
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 progress as a society, and that plays a vital role in terms of efficiency. On the list of positives, I would definitely point out video chat as one critical factor regarding life and
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 balance. While
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 issue may be attention-grabbing in a social context, it is important to realise the favourable outcome
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 has produced in
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 regard. Not to forget it as a time-saver, helping us cut down on gas expenses and pollution costs. On the flip side,
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 and study from home
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 away from a human interaction standpoint, which may unfold in isolation or subdued social skills due to the lack of contact, and might be especially acute in school years when kids are drafting their personality. We have all undergone a pandemic which can be used as a clear precedent of what
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 can bring to our lives. How we were able to connect with our beloved ones during the past lockdown periods
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 when we were able to keep up at
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 or continue our studies from the safety of home. When it comes to weight up on the consequences of
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, I personally think of
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 as a civil engineer, in the sense that we will have to drive along the road he has built.
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 will always lead the way.
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