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Some people believe that a country will benefit greatly if its students study abroad. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that studying abroad
are
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 of great benefit t their home countries. In my opinion, I
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will
 agree with
this
 idea because
students
 studying in another
country
 make the
country
 flourish successfully.
This
 essay will analyse both sides of
this
 view to clarify the conclusion. On the one hand, international
students
 can benefit their home
country
 in economic and societal terms.
For example
,
students
 who have finished their study abroad
they
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can use specialist knowledge to work for or open their own companies with high chances of sustainable success taking up
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 jobs as well as contributing to their countries. It can be seen that if they learn the knowledge of these countries, they will adapt it and make the innovation. These
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innovations
inovations
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innovations
 would change their
country
 and give it an edge over other nations.
On the other hand
, the large number of
student
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students
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 who
initially
go
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 internationally for educational purposes may decide to settle because of
progressive
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 living
condition
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conditions
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 of other regions and they do not return
having
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after being abroad.
For instance
, as the result from UK new the living
country
 offer a stable enough career prospect, and the pay
very
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 high.
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Therefore
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Therefor
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 they do not want to return because
of
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the infrastructure here is good. In conclusion, I strongly agree that the benefits that study abroad
students
brings
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 to their home
country
 are undeniable.
However
, we should have some policies to ensure that these
students
 will be more likely to return after graduating.
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