Although some people value public parks, this space could be better used for other purposes such as residential areas for the ever- growing population or to develop business or boost economies. To what extent do you agree with this?

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In
this
modern world, mankind has been exploiting our natural reserves and forests to develop roads,
towns
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,
to
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build industrial zone and
finally
to
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grow up the economy. Some
people
are still fighting to preserve our natural heritage which I believe is very important and in the below essay, we will elaborate more on
this
topic. In
this
modern era, due to
this
growing population, the government is allowing new developments to happen and
are
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therefore
destroying our natural reserves and green
spaces
.
For example
in Mauritius,
metro
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the metro
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has been recently implemented.
Thus
, many trees and green
spaces
have to be eradicated to accommodate
this
new project. Even though
people
have manifested to preserve the beauty of
such
naturals
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places, they have lost their battle as the government had more power. Green
spaces
such
as parks are important for many human beings,
specially
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children. Having spent the whole day working or going to school, some
people
like to go to the local park, where they can socialise themselves, do sport and above all, they find peace. Obviously, the authorities should preserve these places which are among the free distractions of
people
. By keeping a green space, we are not only preserving the habitat of animals but we are
also
helping in preserving the
ozones
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ozone
zones
.
On the other hand
, if all these green
spaces
are being exploited to
fulfill
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people
's needs, there will definitely be no activities that
people
can enjoy for free. Some
people
hate indoor games and gym but they rather like sport in
fresh
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air. In conclusion, I strongly believe that green
spaces
should be preserved for the
well being
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of human beings,
the
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government should impose strict laws concerning the preservation of nature. Building more buildings and developing more industries will create more global warming
to
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our environment.
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