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You exercise regularly and have been a member of many different gyms. Recently, you moved into a new neighborhood and joined a new gym. You have noticed that people at this gym do not bother to wipe down the machines after use and often leave dirty towels on the benches in the change rooms. Write to Mr Koto, the manager. In your letter:  explain who you are  describe the problem exactly  make suggestions to improve the gym

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Dear Mr Koto, I am writing
this
 letter to let you know of the problems with the gymnasium and suggest measures for its improvement. My name is Jai Vaswani. I am an avid gym-goer and have been exercising regularly for the past 10 years. I have been a member of some of the top fitness centres like Gold’s Gym, GoodLife Fitness and numerous others and have merely joined the Fitness Enthusiast gym, post shifting to Andheri. I have some serious concerns with other attendees that I wish to highlight. Let me explain in detail. I fail to understand why most of the attendees do not wipe the machines after making use of them. Despite my reminders, they continue to leave the equipment sweaty, which can lead to a host of transmittable diseases.
In addition
 to
this
, change rooms are unclean and smelly
as a result
 of the used towels left on the benches. Could you please display clear instructions for all to wipe the machines after use? Could you
also
 keep laundry baskets to collect used towels in the change rooms as well as sensitize everyone to drop the towels in these after use? These measures will result in the overall betterment of the gym. Hope that you would consider the suggestions made. Yours sincerely, Jaikisan Vaswani
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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

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