Some people think that sport teaches children how to compete, while others believe that children learn teamwork. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Sports
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are commonplaces among adolescents and
children
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, there are classes at school or facilities
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the public to encourage
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to do
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. While people have
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diverge
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opinions on sporting can encourage
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to compete or to work as a team, I believe both of these
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can be learnt by
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through
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. From the perspective of learning to compete.
Sports
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like Swimming or running are both competitive
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while
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are require
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to fight for their own. Swimming competitions are usually a solo versus event, where
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will stimulate their adrenaline and fight for the
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spot. Winners tend to fulfil their satisfaction when it is a solo sport.
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, they will become more prepared and competitive for the
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game, in terms to satisfy their thrives for winning. From the perspective of learning teamwork. Basketball is a great example
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define team-based
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sports
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.
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, in a basketball game,
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are required to follow the playbooks and play tactics that the coach has planned.
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, these tactics often include basic skills like passing,
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, some team-based expertise like "pick and roll". All
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have to be
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team
player
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for a chance of winning.
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, a selfish player that does not pass the ball or follow coaches'
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will lead the team to lose.
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,
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will learn to bond with teammates if they are determined to win. To conclude, the fulfilment of winning at a sport can
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children
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's competitive minds and help
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teamwork. And both of these are the attribution for victory.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • competition
  • teamwork
  • individual sports
  • team sports
  • perseverance
  • resilience
  • goals
  • support
  • responsibilities
  • social bonds
  • community
  • communicate
  • trust
  • group effort
  • balanced perspective
  • well-rounded skill set
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