Some people think that sport teaches children how to compete, while others believe that children learn teamwork. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Sports
are commonplaces among adolescents and
children
, there are classes at school or facilities
at
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the public to encourage
children
to do
sports
. While people have
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opinions on sporting can encourage
children
to compete or to work as a team, I believe both of these
benefit
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can be learnt by
children
through
sporting
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. From the perspective of learning to compete.
Sports
like Swimming or running are both competitive
sports
while
players
are require
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to fight for their own. Swimming competitions are usually a solo versus event, where
players
will stimulate their adrenaline and fight for the
first
spot. Winners tend to fulfil their satisfaction when it is a solo sport.
Hence
, they will become more prepared and competitive for the
next
game, in terms to satisfy their thrives for winning. From the perspective of learning teamwork. Basketball is a great example
to
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define team-based
sports
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.
For instance
, in a basketball game,
players
are required to follow the playbooks and play tactics that the coach has planned.
Additionally
, these tactics often include basic skills like passing,
furthermore
, some team-based expertise like "pick and roll". All
players
have to be
a
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team
player
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for a chance of winning.
Conversely
, a selfish player that does not pass the ball or follow coaches'
demand
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will lead the team to lose.
Therefore
,
children
will learn to bond with teammates if they are determined to win. To conclude, the fulfilment of winning at a sport can
boosted
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children
's competitive minds and help
introducing
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teamwork. And both of these are the attribution for victory.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • competition
  • teamwork
  • individual sports
  • team sports
  • perseverance
  • resilience
  • goals
  • support
  • responsibilities
  • social bonds
  • community
  • communicate
  • trust
  • group effort
  • balanced perspective
  • well-rounded skill set
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