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Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys?

#parents #children #toys #child
Some people provide
to
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their
children
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with the
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the
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widely
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number
 of
plaything
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playthings
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 for their
children
 to
playing
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play
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 with them.
personally
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,personally
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 I believe that a large
number
 of
toys
 can
be
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effect
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affect
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in
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the
children
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children's
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 expectation. On the on hand , if
children
 have a large
number
 of plaything maybe have
a
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some
effect
in
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 the
children
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children's
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 life.
firstly
 ,when the kid
have
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 any
toys
 who don’t know the
prize
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price
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 of their plaything , for
instant
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an instant
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, kid don’t
keeping
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 safe of them.
secondly
 , a large of facilities for the
children
 can being
kid
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a kid
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 to spoil, and spoiled brats are not lovely .
finally
, many numbers of
toys
 don’t
using
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 ever because the kids growing up
ant
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and
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 that
toys
un available
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unavailable
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 for them. So
on the other hand
, the great numbers of
the
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apply
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toys
 for
children
 have some positive
effect
in
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 their mentally
of
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kids which they can
imaging
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imagine
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 the different situations with the
toys
 in their mental and make a story with them.
for example
 with small animals
toys
 can
makes
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make
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 the zoo story, and different type of
toys
 help them to makes different stories.when the
children
thinking
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think
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 for
make
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making
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a
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 anecdote their brain was more active and it has
positive
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a positive
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effect
 on their intelligence. In conclusion, we understand that
have
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having
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 a large
number
 of plaything is good for the
children
 when makes their minds active
also
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and also
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 have a bad
effect
in
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on
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children
’s behaviour.
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