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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

You have a problem with a neighbour. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter describe the problem say how long it has been a problem explain what action you want the neighbour to take

Dear Mrs Smith, I am writing to make you aware of the loud music noises we hear from your house
everyday
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every day
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 and how we find it difficult to have a peaceful environment.
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 we have been having
this
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 issue for the
last
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 1 month, we thought you
will
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 take notice and take the necessary steps. Unfortunately!
it
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 didn't happen. We honestly do not mind if we hear the noises for one or two hours
but
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, but
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 sometimes we could hear the songs for almost 10 hours at a stretch. My children are finding it really hard to concentrate on their studies
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 they have their exams end of
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 month as well. And my youngest son is just 06 months old
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 he is finding it really hard to fall asleep. We do not want to take legal action or have an argument over
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Therefore
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Therefore,
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 I would appreciate it if you could look into
this
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 matter at your earliest
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convenience and
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 give us a solution. If you could bring down the volume, I am sure it will
surely
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help my family to get their work done peacefully. Yours sincerely Migara Wickramasinghe

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structure
Break the letter into short parts: opening, the problem, the effect on your family, and the request.
language
Use simple, clear sentences. Fix small errors like 'everyday' to 'every day' and '06 months' to 'six months'.
content
Be clear on what you want and give a time frame for a reply.
tone
Calm and polite tone.
structure
The letter has a greeting and a closing.
content
It states the problem and asks for action.
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