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Nowadays, a lot of offices employ open-space designs instead of separate rooms for work. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this matter?

#offices #open-space #designs #rooms #work #matter
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The
work
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 environment has a great impact on the
work
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 efficiency of
people
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.
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 there are lots of separate
rooms
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 for
work
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 in
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an organization
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organization
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organizations
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, there are
transfer
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 to open space designs
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 nowadays. In
this
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 essay, I will explain
advantages
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the advantages
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 and disadvantages of
offices
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employ
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employing
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open-space
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 designs
instead
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 of separate
rooms
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 for
work
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. There are many benefits of
offices
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employ
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open-space
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 design.
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, making the
work
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 environment more intimate.in
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open-space
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an open-space
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office
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,
employee
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employees
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 see each other
mor
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more
 than
separate
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in separate
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rooms
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office
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. So, they face more and it
cause
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 their relationship will be improving.
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,
employees
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 will be more intimate.
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,
employees
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 will help each other more. Usually in
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open-space
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an open-space
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office
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,
employees
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are
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work
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 alongside
people
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 whose
work
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 is related.
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, when someone has a problem in his or her
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, he or she can easily get help from others because they see each other as easy as they stand up.
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 there are a lot of advantages of
offices
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employ
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employing
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open-space
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 designs
instead
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 of separate
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 for
work
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, there are some disadvantages too. One of them is not everyone can
work
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 in
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open-space
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an open-space
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office
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. In
this
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 kind of
office
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, everyone has seat near each other. If someone has a private problem, others will know about it.as we know,
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 may cause problems between two
people
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.
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, not everyone can
work
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 in
this
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 type of
office
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. The
next
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on
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one
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 is that noise pollution. in
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open-space
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an open-space
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office
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offices
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 the are lots of
phone
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phones
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 and usually many
people
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 are talking on the phone. So, there are
lots
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 of noise pollution. In summary,
although
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offices
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employ
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employing
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open-space
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 design has benefits, it has disadvantages too, making the
work
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 environment more intimate and
increase
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increasing
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 the sense of help of
employees
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 are advantages.
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, there
are
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 someone that they can not
work
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 in
this
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 kind of
office
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 and
open-space
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office
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 are too
much
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apply
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noisy.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • open-space designs
  • separate rooms
  • collaboration
  • communication
  • flexibility
  • adaptability
  • teamwork
  • creativity
  • community
  • privacy
  • concentration
  • noise
  • distractions
  • personal space
  • conflicts
  • tensions
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