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Nowadays, a lot of offices employ open-space designs instead of separate rooms for work. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this matter?

#offices #open-space #designs #rooms #work #matter
The
work
 environment has a great impact on the
work
 efficiency of
people
.
Although
 there are lots of separate
rooms
 for
work
 in
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an organization
the organization
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organization
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organizations
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, there are
transfer
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 to open space designs
instead
 nowadays. In
this
 essay, I will explain
advantages
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the advantages
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 and disadvantages of
offices
employ
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employing
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open-space
 designs
instead
 of separate
rooms
 for
work
. There are many benefits of
offices
employ
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employing
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open-space
 design.
Firstly
, making the
work
 environment more intimate.in
open-space
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an open-space
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office
,
employee
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employees
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 see each other
mor
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more
 than
separate
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in separate
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rooms
office
. So, they face more and it
cause
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 their relationship will be improving.
As a result
,
employees
 will be more intimate.
Secondly
,
employees
 will help each other more. Usually in
open-space
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an open-space
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office
,
employees
are
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work
 alongside
people
 whose
work
 is related.
Thus
, when someone has a problem in his or her
work
, he or she can easily get help from others because they see each other as easy as they stand up.
Although
 there are a lot of advantages of
offices
employ
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employing
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open-space
 designs
instead
 of separate
rooms
 for
work
, there are some disadvantages too. One of them is not everyone can
work
 in
open-space
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an open-space
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office
. In
this
 kind of
office
, everyone has seat near each other. If someone has a private problem, others will know about it.as we know,
this
 may cause problems between two
people
.
Therefore
, not everyone can
work
 in
this
 type of
office
. The
next
on
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one
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 is that noise pollution. in
open-space
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an open-space
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office
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offices
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 the are lots of
phone
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phones
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 and usually many
people
 are talking on the phone. So, there are
lots
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lot
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 of noise pollution. In summary,
although
offices
employ
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employing
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open-space
 design has benefits, it has disadvantages too, making the
work
 environment more intimate and
increase
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increasing
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 the sense of help of
employees
 are advantages.
However
, there
are
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 someone that they can not
work
 in
this
 kind of
office
 and
open-space
office
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offices
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 are too
much
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apply
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noisy.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • open-space designs
  • separate rooms
  • collaboration
  • communication
  • flexibility
  • adaptability
  • teamwork
  • creativity
  • community
  • privacy
  • concentration
  • noise
  • distractions
  • personal space
  • conflicts
  • tensions
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