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Many people find it difficult to speak in front of and to present to anaudience. It is believed that this skill should be taught in school. Why is this important? To what extent do you agree or disagree with it?

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In
the
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modern society, talking and presenting in public is a key
skill
 to have.
However
,
majority
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 of adults still struggle with it,
therefore
 it is believed that it is a requirement to learn in school.
This
 essay will outline the importance of being taught
this
skill
 in school and how I fully agree with
this
 statement. Public speaking is a valuable
skill
 which will help in any career. Being inadequate in
this
skill
 can lead to
lack
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 of confidence in a social setting, which can
further
 lead to social anxiety. Tackling
this
 in school will allow students to work on their skills in a safer environment and be able to have good feedback from their teachers to improve.
Also
, learning from a young age, the
skill
 will become innate to them and be able to perform exceedingly in any environment. The ability to speak in front of an audience not only improves their confidence but gives
more
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them more
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 job opportunities. People will apply to more jobs in a bigger
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workforce
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work force
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 and elite jobs because they know who they are and
confident
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on
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 what they can say and present.
For example
, a student who has been going to a debating society for 5 years will have found her way of thinking and would know how to present ideas clearly.
Therefore
, she will be able
articulate
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 better in interviews.
Hence
 why it is important to learn from a young age. To summarise, I believe that public speaking is essential in
this
 modern society,
which
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 should be implemented in schools.
This
 will help more young adults to gain valuable skills to accelerate in working life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Articulate
  • Oratory
  • Elocution
  • Persuasive communication
  • Rhetorical skills
  • Eloquence
  • Confidence
  • Stage presence
  • Audience engagement
  • Non-verbal communication
  • Public discourse
  • Persuasion techniques
  • Presentation skills
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Diction
  • Anxiousness
  • Introversion
  • Curriculum integration
  • Subject mastery
  • Communication aptitude
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