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More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in foreign countries. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks

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The bar graph illustrates the outcome of a study regarding individuals’
coffee
 and tea consumption as well as purchasing habits in Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart. Overall, apart from residents of Adelaide, the vast majority of inhabitants in four different cities drank their hot drinks in cafes
instead
 of buying fresh or
instant
coffee
 in the
last
 4 weeks.
Moreover
, people who live in Melbourne showed the largest proportion of cafe drinkers. The highest
instant
coffee
 purchasing rate was in Hobart at about 55
percent
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.
Additionally
, persons who bought
instant
coffee
 in Brisbane placed
second
 highest in that section.
However
, with approximately % 45 amount of
instant
coffee
 marketing Sydney’s commuters were the least. When it comes to data about the public who bought fresh
coffee
last
 month, the rate demonstrated the smallest amount of people compared with the other categories.
Therefore
, the biggest chunk in Sydney with around 43
percent
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