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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
last
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 few years, medical
treatment
 has surely become a sort of luxury, rather than a necessity. Many people may hold on to the view that paying money up front provides
faster
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treatment
.
However
, I belong to the group of individuals who concur with the idea that having free health
service
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services
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 is more beneficial.
This
 essay will articulate my opinion and agreement regarding the benefits of free medical treatments.
To begin
 with, there are several
countries
 that are unable to provide free health
service
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services
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, especially
the
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developing
countries
. Basically, the process in
such
countries
 simply includes paying an upfront amount for any desired
treatment
, which could cost severely.
For instance
, my grandmother
last
 year was diagnosed with Cancer and did not
had
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 any medical insurance at that moment. Despite the advanced
treatment
 being available, the cost was incredibly high and that became a cause of trauma and distress for our family.
On the contrary
, numerous developed
countries
 provide free of cost medical
treatment
.
Nevertheless
, it is a fact that
such
 processes have a high wait time and in some cases, there is no advanced technology available for some complicated cases.
However
, many people do not realize that not having to pay an immense amount results in relieving them of financial pressure. In conclusion, I stand with my statement and I believe more
countries
 should provide medical services for free or for an inadequate amount.
Moreover
, governments should indulge and come up with various policies for their citizens as attaining
such
 services should be a right and not a luxury.
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