YOUR FAMILY HAS PARTICIPATED IN 'NO TECHNOLOGY' CHALLENGE FOR A WEEK. DESCRIBE THE CHANGES YOU EXPERIENCED.

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Dear Yuta, It’s been ages since I

last

heard from you. How are you? I’m writing to tell you about the

challenge

that my family recently took part in during the school holiday called the “ no

technology

“

challenge

. My father was the one that suggested

this

challenge

because he noticed that all of us

has

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have

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been addicted to

technology

. My family members agreed to take part in

this

challenge

and we

cant

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can't

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use

technology

such

phone

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phones

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,television,vacuum and much more for a whole week! Honestly, it’s a lot more difficult than I expected. I tried really hard to

restrained

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restrain

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myself to not

use

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using

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any

technology

especially

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,especially

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my phone. Whenever I need extra information for my homework, I need to go to the library because I can’t

use

my computer to search

information

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for information

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. I’ve

also

needed to heat water every

time

to shower because I can’t

use

the water heater. When it’s

time

to eat, we all gather together

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the kitchen to help mum

making

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make

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food because there’s a lot of work to do as some of the cooking equipment

are

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forbidden. After completing

this

challenge

there’s

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there are

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a lot of habits that

has

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have

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changed. I’m not scrolling on social media anymore

instead

I do my homework and read books. My family members

also

began to socialize more than usual and we went exercise every evening to spend more

time

together. I have to pen off now. Till

time

,take care!

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4Word repetition
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242 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.5

Complete response

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YOUR FAMILY HAS PARTICIPATED IN 'NO TECHNOLOGY' CHALLENGE FOR A WEEK. DESCRIBE THE CHANGES YOU EXPERIENCED.

Fully explain your ideas

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