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Some people believe that tourist should accept social and environmental responsibility while other believe that tourists should not accept any responsibility at all. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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The given line graph compares four different
sectors
 in the UK in terms of the
amount
 of acid rain
emission
, from 1990 to 2007, and the units are measured in million tonnes. Overall, it is clear that the
amount
 of acid rain
emission
 from all
sectors
, except transport and communication, demonstrated a downward trend in the given period.
Additionally
, the domestic had the least
amount
 of
emission
 throughout the years given. Looking
first
 at the
sectors
 of other industries and domestic, these two categories showed a similar trend, both experiencing a gradual decrease. The
amount
 of domestic acid rain
emission
 decreased from about 2.1 in 1990 to roughly 1.25 in 2007, and that of other industries stood at about 0.6 at the beginning
then
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and then
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 fell to merely 0.25 in the end. Moving onto the sector that supplies electricity, water and gas, and the sector that offers transport and communication, the two
sectors
 showed
a
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different development. The former experienced a steady decline from approximately 3.25 in 1990 to below 0.5 in 2007, whereas that of the latter started to increase from 0.75 in 1991 and peaked at around 1 in 2005;
however
, the figure decreased in the following two years and ended up at 0.75 again in 2007.
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