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Every country should have a free-health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is an undeniable fact that many
people
 believe that medical
services
 should be free in every
nation
 . It is
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responsibilities
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 of
government
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 to give prima facie
for
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their
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people
 of
nation
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the nation
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 . Whilst,
this
 approach may lead to the burden of budget on the
government
also
 . For
betterment
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 of
health
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personally
personallly
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personally
 believe that medical
services
 should be free in every
nation
 , and
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 for my inclination
are
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 articulated in
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 paragraphs.
First
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 and foremost reason to support my ideology is that
,
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people
pays
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 taxes for basic requirements and they think that
government
 should give them facilities
such
 as education ,
health
 and infrastructure.
Moreover
, nowadays many
people
 are suffering from
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different diseases and many of them are not able to take expensive medical treatments so it is clear that authorities should try to give free
health
services
. Another reason to support my justification is that
,
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it would be beneficial for
nation
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also
 when it comes to
the
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health
 .
Furthermore
,
people
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should
sholuld
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should
also
 take care of their
health
 which
avoid
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 expenses. On the other side , some
people
 argue that when
government
 give free
health
services
 it may create
burden
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 on the economy of
nation
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also
.
This
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approach
approch
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also
affect
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 the private hospital and it would
be
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lead to financial difficulties .
In addition
 , when
government
 give free
services
people
 do not value
it
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them
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. It should not be free but
government
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should
sholuld
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should
 develop the facilities in
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the hospital
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hospital
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. To conclude ,
government
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the government
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 should try to develop facilities regarding
health
instead
 of free but it is
also
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responsibilities
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 of
people
 that they have to take care of their
health
 .
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