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Every country should have a free-health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is an undeniable fact that many
people
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services
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 should be free in every
nation
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responsibilities
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people
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 . Whilst,
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 of
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personally
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personally
 believe that medical
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 should be free in every
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 for my inclination
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 and foremost reason to support my ideology is that
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people
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pays
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 taxes for basic requirements and they think that
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 should give them facilities
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 and infrastructure.
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, nowadays many
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 are suffering from
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different diseases and many of them are not able to take expensive medical treatments so it is clear that authorities should try to give free
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services
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. Another reason to support my justification is that
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it would be beneficial for
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nation
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health
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,
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should
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should
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 take care of their
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 which
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 expenses. On the other side , some
people
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 argue that when
government
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 give free
health
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services
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 it may create
burden
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 on the economy of
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nation
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approach
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affect
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 the private hospital and it would
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lead to financial difficulties .
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 , when
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people
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 do not value
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. It should not be free but
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should
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should
 develop the facilities in
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the hospital
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hospital
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hospitals
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. To conclude ,
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government
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the government
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 should try to develop facilities regarding
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instead
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 of free but it is
also
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the responsibilities
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responsibilities
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 of
people
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 that they have to take care of their
health
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