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the cgart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying abd drinking habits in 5 australian cities

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The results of
questionnaire
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 about people’s habits and choice based on
coffee
 and tea
is
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 represented in
bar
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 chart. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that going to
cafe
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a cafe
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 option is the most popular among citizens of Australia. According to individuals, who purchased fresh
coffee
 in
last
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 4 weeks is deteriorated
over
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 cities. In Sydney
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for example
 was the highest (44%)
precent
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per cent
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 as well as in Brisbane and
Adelaide
 represents
same
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a same
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 percentage(34%) in
this
 category. Habitants who selected to buy instant
coffee
is
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are
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 higher than
previous
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the previous
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 option(fresh
coffee
). Exactly 45% of people in Sydney purchased instant
coffee
 and citizens of Brisbane and Hobart have near
same
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the same
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 results. Regarding
to
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the most demanding trend among drinking habits,
a great deal of
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a lot of
many
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 individuals get used to
go
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 to
the
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apply
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coffee
 shops in order to get fresh
coffee
. Melbourne and Hobart ranked
same
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 amount
of
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trend about 64%. Interestingly, citizens of
Adelaide
 have nearly identical
percents
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 in 2 options: purchasing instant
coffee
(49%) and
went
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going
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 to
cafe
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a cafe
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 to buy
coffee
 (48%) .
Similarly
, people buying fresh
coffee
 in Brisbane are matching
as
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Adelaide
. A great difference between
23
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 options we can see in all cities except
Adelaide
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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