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The word is experiencing a dramatic increase in population, thus is causing problem not only for poor, undeveloped countries, but also fir industrialised and developing nations. describe some of the problem that overpopulation causes, and suggest at least on possible solution.

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Introduction
The
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causing
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problem
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 not only for poor, undeveloped
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also
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Body paragraph 1
describe some of the
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overpopulation
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causes
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solution
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.The
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world
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 is experiencing a dramatic
increase
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 in
population
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,
thus
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is
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apply
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causing
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the problem
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problem
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problems
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 not only for poor, undeveloped
countries
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,
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apply
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 but
also
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for
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fir
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for
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 industrialised and developing
nations
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.
Body paragraph 2
describe some of the
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problem
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problems
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 that
overpopulation
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causes
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, and suggest at least
on
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one
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possible
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a possible
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solution
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.The
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word
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world
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 is experiencing a dramatic
increase
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 in
population
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,
thus
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is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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causing
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Add an article
the problem
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problem
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problems
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 not only for poor, undeveloped
countries
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,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 but
also
Linking Words
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Correct your spelling
for
show examples
fir
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for
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 industrialised and developing
nations
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.
Body paragraph 3
describe some of the
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problem
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problems
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 that
overpopulation
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causes
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, and suggest at least
on
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one
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possible
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a possible
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solution
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.The
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word
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world
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 is experiencing a dramatic
increase
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 in
population
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,
thus
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is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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causing
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Add an article
the problem
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problem
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problems
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 not only for poor, undeveloped
countries
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,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 but
also
Linking Words
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Correct your spelling
for
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fir
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for
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 industrialised and developing
nations
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.
Body paragraph 4
describe some of the
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problem
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problems
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 that
overpopulation
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causes
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, and suggest at least
on
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one
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possible
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a possible
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solution
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.The
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word
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world
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 is experiencing a dramatic
increase
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 in
population
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,
thus
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is
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
causing
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Add an article
the problem
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problem
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problems
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 not only for poor, undeveloped
countries
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,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 but
also
Linking Words
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for
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fir
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for
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 industrialised and developing
nations
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.
Body paragraph 5
describe some of the
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problem
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problems
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 that
overpopulation
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causes
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, and suggest at least
on
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one
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possible
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a possible
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solution
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.The
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word
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world
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 is experiencing a dramatic
increase
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 in
population
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,
thus
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is
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
causing
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Add an article
the problem
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problem
Fix the agreement mistake
problems
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 not only for poor, undeveloped
countries
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,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 but
also
Linking Words
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for
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fir
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for
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 industrialised and developing
nations
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.
Conclusion
describe some of the
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problem
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problems
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 that
overpopulation
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causes
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, and suggest at least
on
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one
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possible
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solution
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dramatic increase
  • undeveloped countries
  • industrialised nations
  • resource strain
  • environmental degradation
  • food security
  • malnutrition
  • unemployment rates
  • economic instability
  • healthcare challenges
  • mortality rates
  • infectious diseases
  • urban overcrowding
  • strained infrastructure
  • pollution levels
  • educational resources
  • family planning programs
  • living standards
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