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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some of
society
 argue that student should continue their
education
 in a
field
 which is like university, while some others agree that they should study in a
field
 which is good for the
future
. Personally ,in my ,opinion it is very important that I like the
field
 of my study, so I agree with the
first
 group of
people
. On the one hand, there are some reasons that
people
 should like their subjects of
education
 ,
firstly
 , if students do not love their
field
 of
education
 there have no motive to exercise in lessons and develop new things or methods.
Secondly
 , it is possible they can not finish their course they do not like , for
instead
 ,because they do not have the motivation can not practice learning the lessons so they can not pass their exams ,
finally
people
 who learn unlike subject maybe in
future
 will be regretful because of wrong decisions
On the other hand
 , if
people
 choose their educational
field
 with attention to
future
society
 needs,
firstly
, when they are finishing their course ,they can find a suitable job easily, for ,example while they know in
future
society
 needs more dentists ,when they choosing dentistry they have jobs in
this
field
 in some years later.
Secondly
, if they want to fulfil the needs of
society
 ,governments support them.
finally
, students do have to not worry about their debatable futures. In conclusion,I believe that somebody choosing their subject of
education
 with their like .
also
, it is important that
field
 will be useful in
future
 .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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