The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.

The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California

and the rest of the world.
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The pie charts illustrate the
water
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consumption for household, industry, and agricultural
purposes
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in San Diego, California, and the world as a whole.
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,
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for residential
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dominates among other sectors in both San Diego and California figures,
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the agriculture segment has the biggest percentage in global
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. San Diego County residents
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most of their
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usage for housing needs, at three-fourths among other
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, which is followed by industrial demand for about a third of that. The remaining percentage of that was utilized for agricultural
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at exactly 17%.
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segment ranks first among other proportions of worldwide
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, at 69%. The other global
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consumption set for residents’ needs, reaching the lowest number among other fields, accounted for only below a tenth, which is one-sixth of world industrial usage. California is the only region that has slightly the same percentages in each field as residential
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come first at just under two-fifths.
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6% of that number,
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allocated for industry
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,
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it is followed by agriculture at 28%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, purposes, use with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • households
  • significant
  • industrial use
  • implications
  • agriculture
  • geographical
  • climatic
  • economic factors
  • patterns
  • sustainability
  • practices
  • surprising
  • exceptionally
  • improvements
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