“Groups and organizations form a vital part of people’s lives. Why do people join groups? What role do groups play in people’s lives? Support your opinion with specific reasons.”

In
this
modern and hectic world,
people
need to socialise
themselves
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.
Therefore
,
groups
and
organisations
are the
mean
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means
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that
people
utilise to socialise themselves. By joining
groups
,
people
feel important and in
this
essay, we will discuss
on
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the pros and cons of joining a
group
and I will elaborate on the role of
groups
in
people
's life.
First
and foremost,
groups
and
organisations
are means that
people
distress themselves, by meeting
people
and chatting.
People
work very hard
everyday
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and sometimes
,
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when they go to
club
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a club
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for a poker party, they feel
relax
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relaxed
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and enjoy
some
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a
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good
time
which
make
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them less
tensed
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. On the other side, some
people
like to be in
sport
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groups
, benevolent
organisations
,
leisure
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and leisure
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groups
. But most of all, these activities in
groups
helps
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help
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people
to have a purpose as an individual and contribute to their well-being.Even at school,
groups
are organised
such
as
dancing
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a dancing
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group
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groups
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which students enjoy very much.
In
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the period of
pandemic
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the pandemic
a pandemic
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, surveys have shown that the health state of many individuals
have
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has
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degraded.
Consequently
, they have proved that the fact that
people
did not socialise themselves,had many downsides
on
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for
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them, they have suffered traumas
resulted
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resulting
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from
loneliness
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the loneliness
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.
However
, some
groups
and
organisations
may not all
the
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time
have
good
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a good
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influence as well,
for example
, there are
groups
who
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that
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influence
people
to drink and
gambling
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. Obviously, an individual should analyse whether a
group
is suitable for him. Without any doubt,
groups
and
organisations
are
a
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apply
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vital parts
in
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of
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people
's life. I believe that the advantages are more significant than having drawbacks.
Nevertheless
,
time
spent in
group
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the group
a group
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should not impact a person's
time
with his family.
People
should make
choice
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choices
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for the
groups
in which they are members.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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