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Some people think climate change has a negative impact on business, while others think that it provides more business options. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is almost undeniable at
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 point that
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change
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 might be the most dangerous threat that humanity has to encounter and will need to be addressed immediately. Even though an abrupt
change
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 in
climate
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 around the world might force
people
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 to adjust their way of living and
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, give new ideas for
businesses
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 to come up with new
products
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. I believe that in long term the impacts that
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change
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 has on both
people
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 and
businesses
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 around the globe will trump its benefit and I will elaborate more on
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 in the following paragraphs.
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 and foremost,
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change
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 does not just mean that the storms will be more severe or there will be floods more often.
Change
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 in
climate
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 includes the rise in overall temperatures and sea levels around the world. A slight
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 in the environment could potentially harm numerous animal species and natural habitats and completely
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 those areas forever. Lands that are suitable for farming and growing crops might be affected by
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 environmental issue, combined with unpredictable weather could halt the production of raw outputs that will be used in producing goods later on.
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, with
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change
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 becoming more severe, a lot of areas will be underwater in the future which will force
people
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 to lose their homes and way of living. And
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, they are likely to lose their ability to spend on goods and
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 which in long term will lead the economy into a recession and negatively affect the business. Most importantly, Unsustainable business practices and one of the main factors that help accelerate
climate
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change
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.
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, the faster
businesses
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 try to come up with new goods by using immoral practices and destroying natural resources, and emitting pollution and toxic chemicals to the environment, the more severe
climate
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 disasters are going to be. It is a vicious cycle that needs to be broken by the cooperation of
people
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, governments, and most importantly the
businesses
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 themselves.
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,
businesses
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 can still be benefited from these changes in the environment which will eventually lead to
people
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 having to adjust their lifestyles.
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, air pollution and PM 2.5 problems have been one of the most prominent issues for Thai
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 over the past 5 years. Because of
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 issue, a lot of
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 were forced to wear masks when going outside even before COVID and air purifier quickly became the default electronic appliance that every house needs to have which in a way, helped
businesses
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 to thrive and quickly innovate better
products
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 for the market to keep up with the high demand. In conclusion, it is possible that
climate
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change
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 will give an idea for
people
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 to invent new
products
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 and have positive impacts on business but
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 tiny advantage is comparable to catastrophic results that
climate
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change
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 can bring upon us.

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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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