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People nowadays prefer to interact online (e.g. do shopping, chat with friends) rather than talking to other people face-to-face. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or negative development?

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It is pretty common that
people
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 to become more and more reliant on the
internet
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instead
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 of facing others in person.
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 essay will explain why
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 happens, and give my opinion. There are several reasons that make
people
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 prefer to use the
internet
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. The
first
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 thing is that digital devices are more common than before,
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, computers and smartphones are much cheaper than ever, so
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 afford to buy them.
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, an increasing number of
people
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 can use their phones or computers to surf the
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, and the rapidly developing of the
internet
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 allows
people
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 to do more with it. We can buy anything we want on shopping websites, which is faster and more convenient.
People
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 can contact others through instant communication apps, so they do not need to talk to
people
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 face-to-face.
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, many
people
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 would like to interact online
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 of face-to-face.
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,
this
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 trend could cause some significant problems. The
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 problem is
people
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 spend a long time staying at home. We can handle almost everything online, and due to
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people
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 are less likely to go outside. If they stay at home too long, they will easily catch a range of diseases.
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, a number of
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 suffer from obesity at present time, because compare with
people
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 who live in a time without the
internet
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 they walk less.
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,
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 are paying more attention to the virtual world, which has a bad effect on their relationships. We can see that children addicted to the
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 are estranged from their families. To sum up, the development of society and technology makes
people
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 more and more dependent on the
Internet
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, and it
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 brings some problems.

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