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Tourism is causing environmental problems all around the world. What are the main causes of this? What are some solutions?

#tourism #world
It is
ture
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true
 that many ordinary
peole
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people
 have
instrincted
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instructed
dream
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 to be
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an explorer
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explorer
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.Someone would like to join some tourism project to the area out of the edge of civilizations, like
inner
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 land of Africa , Snow mountains in Tibet or some caves few
people
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. According to stories from media or
environment
 protection
NGO's
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 reports, many tourism
project
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projects
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 have caused problems on environmental issues everywhere. One of the most common
topic
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 is
tourist
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tourists
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 left
many
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 trash over the mountains, even at the boot of
hymalaya
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Himalayan
Himalaya
 snow mountain. Most of them are made of plastic which needs
hundreds
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 years to decay. Another issue is
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the destruction or
irrepairable
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irreparable
 influence on
local
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environment
,
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especially
espically
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especially
 in some Caves, which are sensitive to light.The
third
 problem is species
invision
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invasion
envision
. Most of them happened
in
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 Island,
while
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 some
visitor
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visitors
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 arrive
to
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 the island, they could
brought
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 some ants from home which destroyed the whole
belance
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balance
 of the local ecological balance. Social
activiters
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activities
have
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 do lobby for many years in
west
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 world. They
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believe
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belive
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believe
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 the crucial method to absolve the problem is
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legitimacy
legitimate
legitamacy
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legitimacy
. They want to set laws or bills to protect special zones and
forbiden
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forbidden
people
to
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entrance
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enter
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such
area
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, except they could get permission from
environment
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the environment
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to protect
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protect
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protection
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 ministry. Another way
people
 should try is
propogenda
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propaganda
. Media
people
 should cover more stories on
environment
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environmental
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issue
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issues
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 to
public
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the public
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, setting
agenda
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 on green topics. While
public
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the public
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have
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 more sense
on
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 the topic, it will be very helpful to decrease the hurt from human kinds to our earth. In my conclusion, I hope everyone who
love
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 to travel or
be
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apply
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a favorite
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favorite
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 to
exploration
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, should understand that protecting the earth is our duty.
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