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Having more international sporting events (such as the Olympic Games) may promote world peace. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#events #olympic #games #world #peace
I am referring to your care of Ms Naomi Barnes, a patient in our centre who has been diagnosed with diabetes mellitus since 2015. She will be needing your expertise in the preparation of a diabetic meal plan, recommendation of healthy meals to reduce weight and ways how to manage her diabetes. For her diabetes, she was on Janumet 50/1000 mg twice daily. Regarding her diet, she has meal delivery on weekdays, while on weekends, she generally cocked her own meals including frozen meat, bread, pasta and cereals. She was observed non-compliant with her medications.
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, her alcohol intake and adherence to her medications. It would be greatly appreciated if you could monitor her blood sugar level, alcohol intake and adherence to her medications. If you have any concerns, feel free to contact me.
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