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humans are demaging the environment. what can government do to address these problems and what can individual do?

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Across countries, it has been considered that we are destroying our surrounding circumstances in various ways.
This
 essay will discuss to prevent
this
 devastation
what
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and what
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measures
meassures
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measures
 each person and government can be taken.
First
 and foremost, to
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control
controle
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control
unprecedented
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 growth of
environment
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environmental
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 pollution authorities can
advocating
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 a
numbers
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 of steps.
Firstly
, in order to capture these situations governments can alter the rules for manufacturers and firms,
for example
, if governments had changed the rule for the consumption of fossil fuels, it is obviously bringing down the carbon emission rate
to
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 the air.
Secondly
, governments should organize various types of public awareness events
such
 as
,
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apply
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 street drama,
advertising
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and advertising
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.
On the other hand
,
this
 is
also
a
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the
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 responsibility
for
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of
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 residents to care about nature and
it's
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its
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 habitat. In
stand
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a stand
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 of private vehicles, they ought to be commuted by public transportations and
car pools
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carpools
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, which mitigate carbon emission figures to the air.
Moreover
, to protect endangered species they must cut down the used number of artificial fertilizers and poison spey
to
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 their farmland.
Besides
this
, manufacturers
as well as general people
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, as well as general people,
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 have to use renewable or green energy for their production and daily work purpose,
for instance
, allocate solar power, wind energy and wave power. To sum up, we have only one planet to live
, to
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on, to
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 remain fresh and fair we should share our
shoulder
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 with the government to
prohib
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prohibit
 environmental pollution.
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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
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  • Conclusion

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