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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of diverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages.

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These days, technology has changed our lives. In
coming
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 days, all
vehicles
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cars
, buses and trucks will be automatic.
This
 greatest innovation has some benefits and drawbacks. In my opinion,
advantages
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the advantages
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 of
this
 advancement of technology in
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motorwheel
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 department
outweight
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outweigh
outweighs
 the disadvantages. In
this
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driverless
vehicles
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use
 and
also
 give my point of view.
Firstly
, in the modern era, everyone loves to
use
 automatic
cars
 as
this
save
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your
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time.
For example
, during
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travelling
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traveling
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,traveling
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 you can
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spend
spen
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spend
 your time
in
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on
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 your hobbies, like using
internet
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, enjoying music, reading
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the newspaper
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newspaper
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newspapers
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, watching
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a movie
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movie
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movies
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 etc.
Secondly
, by using driverless
vehicles
, you can reduce the risk of road accidents.
For instance
,
the
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drunk drivers hit
the
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vehicles
 and cause serious disasters
to
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 their own health and
the
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motorwheels
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motor wheels
motor wheel
also
. So, by using automatic
cars
, buses and trucks you can overcome
this
 problem. On the other side, there are some disadvantages of
this
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innovation
inovation
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innovation
.
Firstly
, with the
use
 of automatic
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motor wheels
, there is a decline in the driving sector as the need
of
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for
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 drivers reduced in great
number
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numbers
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.
Hence
, many people in the driving sector face unemployment which becomes a big problem for
the
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developing countries in the future.
Furthermore
, with the
use
 of the latest
vehicles
 the demand
of
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the
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older
cars
 reduced
in
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highest
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the highest
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 level and in
this
 way
motorwheel
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motor wheel
 companies face
the
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economical issues. To sum up, I
am completely agree
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 with the former opinion that
benefits
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the benefits
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 of
usage
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the usage
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 of automatic
vehicles
outweight
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outweigh
 the drawbacks.
Moreover
, in the future, the
suage
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usage
 of these driverless latest
cars
 becomes
necessary
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the necessary
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 need of many people.
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