Overeating is a more widespread problem in the world in comparison to hunger. Why overeating is more important than hunger? What can we do to tackle overeating?

The line graph gives information about the
number
of closures and openings in a country from 2011 to 2018. It is clear that the figures fluctuated over the shown period. Overall, the lowest
number
of closures was in 2015 whereas there were the least openings in 2012. In 2011, almost 8500 shops were opened while the figure for closed ones was about 6300. The
number
of opened stores fell suddenly to 4000 in 2012 before going up to just above 6000 in 2014. Closing shops experienced a fluctuation between 2011 and 2014, peaking at approximately 7000 in 2013. The
number
of people who closed their shops fell sharply to 500 in 2015.
However
, it soared significantly to around 5000 in the
next
year and stayed at the same level over the
next
two years.
Although
the opened cases in 2015 were similar to the 2012 level and remained stable till 2017, the figure saw a
further
decline to 3000 at the end of the period.
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