In may places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. what is your opinion about this?

Nowadays,
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population
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need to be preserved and not to build new flats in these areas.I completely disagree with
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estate market.
firstly
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, there are limited jobs and facilities.
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that, big construction companies will involve in
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development and they will provide more jobs in different fields.
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industries
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different skills
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carpentry
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of rural
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, will have jobs within walking distance.
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,
people
no need to travel so far from their location.
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places to live in
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area
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is responsible for
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inflation
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estate market. To illustrate, according to
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of 2011 in Toronto city, the average rent of houses was 1000 CAD per month, whereas in
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that
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rent is 2500 CAD . not only that but
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,
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is only
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option for new construction. To conclude,
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development plays a paramount role to develop
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of rural areas.
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people
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accommodation
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the inflation rate of housing.
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  • Urbanization
  • Ecological benefits
  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Carbon sequestration
  • Sustainable development
  • Eco-friendly building materials
  • Green architecture
  • Government policies
  • Urban sprawl
  • Infrastructure
  • Smart planning
  • Agricultural lands
  • Rural areas
  • Population growth
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