Many young people are motivated and successful at high school. Many others, however, lack motivation and see high school as irrelevant to their interests and needs. Why is this? What could be done to help all students succeed?
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the motivation
school
students
to go their school
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for their future
and pressure
from their parents
. If high school
has non-academic classes
, it will relieve the difficult situation
and be motivation
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of
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for
students
.school
students
have strong
Add an article
a strong
motivation
to their school
and gain success in school
life. On the other hand
, there are students
who cannot have plenty of motivation
and recognize their high schools as irrelevant to their interests and what they want. I suppose the cause of this
situation
is a
Correct article usage
the
pressure
of study and future
. Furthermore
, I believe that a
Correct article usage
the
implementation
of non-academic classes
at high school
will be a solution
to this
problem.
When I think reasons of depress
and Replace the word
depression
low-
Correct your spelling
low motivation
motivation
to
high Change preposition
in
school
, the reason might be the pressure
for entrance
Correct article usage
the entrance
exam
of
Change preposition
to
university
. Recently, Add an article
the university
tendency
of putting Add an article
the tendency
value
on Add an article
a value
educational
background is notable in society. Of course, brilliant grades Add an article
the educational
is
needed for gaining the right for entering Change the verb form
are
high-level
Correct article usage
a high-level
university
. Many of
Change preposition
apply
parents
hopes
their children Change the verb form
hope
to
pass the famous Fix the infinitive
apply
university’s
Change noun form
university
entering
Replace the word
entrance
exam
. This
situation
will leads
to Change the verb form
lead
the
excessive Correct article usage
apply
pressure
of
the Change preposition
on
students
.
I believe that implementation
of non-academic Correct article usage
the implementation
class
in high Fix the agreement mistake
classes
school
might be a solution
to improve the situation
. As I wrote, adolescent students
need opportunities to escape from daily
rush to relieve their Add an article
the daily
a daily
stress
. Holding non-academic class
is not only achieving Fix the agreement mistake
classes
this
aim,
Add the word(s)
but,
also
a chance
to find interesting
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an interesting
the interesting
theme
that Fix the agreement mistake
themes
relate
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relates
with
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to
their
Change the word
the
future
for student
. Add an article
the student
Moreover
, enjoying music and arts in non-academic class
with friends is meaningful for high-Fix the agreement mistake
classes
school
student
because it will be Fix the agreement mistake
students
chance
to learn Correct article usage
a chance
building
good Change the verb form
to build
friendship
and give Fix the agreement mistake
friendships
motivation
for continuing to go high
Change preposition
to high
school
.
In recent days, keeping motivation
of high Correct article usage
the motivation
school
students
to go their school
is so difficult. They hold a lot of stress
for their future
and pressure
from their parents
. If high school
has non-academic classes
, it will relieve the difficult situation
and be motivation
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a motivation
of
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for
students
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